Direct Address Lead:
If you were you looking forward to the 2011-2012 NBA season, well you may be disappointed for the reason that it might be cancelled.
David Stern and the committee has made progress but not enough to guaranty the normal season will start as it was planned.
Thesis:The committee should come to an agreement before they affect the season and disappoint many people such as fans, sponsors, markets etc.
Startling Statement:
By Monday they will have to choice but to cancel the first two weeks of the normal season. Both sides are far apart from arriving at an agreement for most of the conflicts. David Stern said that they were not able to make the progress they were hoping to achieve on Tuesday. The players were the ones that disagreed with the agreement of splitting the profit 50/50.
Thesis: The players should pick a percentage that's reachable for the owners and still be a fair amount for themselves.
Contrast and Compare:
Six months ago we were looking forwards to a great NBA season and wanted to see who would make it to the playoffs this season. A month later a lockout was pronounced and stop all the commotion and began to grow the question of,’Is the season at jeopardy again.’ The last NBA lockout they came to an agreement to late and had to start a season that was shorter than the normal one.
Thesis: They should come to an agreement as quickly as they can so they will not affect the normal season. Kicker14(Noe R)
If you were you looking forward to the 2011-2012 NBA season, well you may be disappointed for the reason that it might be cancelled.
David Stern and the committee has made progress but not enough to guaranty the normal season will start as it was planned.
Thesis:The committee should come to an agreement before they affect the season and disappoint many people such as fans, sponsors, markets etc.
Startling Statement:
By Monday they will have to choice but to cancel the first two weeks of the normal season. Both sides are far apart from arriving at an agreement for most of the conflicts. David Stern said that they were not able to make the progress they were hoping to achieve on Tuesday. The players were the ones that disagreed with the agreement of splitting the profit 50/50.
Thesis: The players should pick a percentage that's reachable for the owners and still be a fair amount for themselves.
Contrast and Compare:
Six months ago we were looking forwards to a great NBA season and wanted to see who would make it to the playoffs this season. A month later a lockout was pronounced and stop all the commotion and began to grow the question of,’Is the season at jeopardy again.’ The last NBA lockout they came to an agreement to late and had to start a season that was shorter than the normal one.
Thesis: They should come to an agreement as quickly as they can so they will not affect the normal season. Kicker14(Noe R)
Kicker14 LOLCATZ make sure you have one big paragraph for your direct address rather than having multiple one sentence ones.
ReplyDeleteThe contrast and compare was the best but you should probably put the thesis in the paragraph.
ReplyDelete-Myka
direct address.
ReplyDelete-Chopsticks
The compare and contrast was the best one.
ReplyDelete-Burrito(Kevin Guzman)
Startling statement doesn't make sense, who will be cancelling?
ReplyDeleteI liked the compare and contrast the best.
I liked the compare and contrast lead, it was interesting and it made me want to read more.
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